johnnycancer's art Reviews on Newgrounds

[Avatar Snowskin Mooncakes]

I have to say I think this is a pretty successful rendering because before I read in your comments that it was a 3D rendering I was thinking that maybe the mooncakes were made out of polymer clay or resin.

[thoughts on the edge]

Overall, a good piece showcasing your strengths

Okay, so this is probably coming a little late, but I have to totally disagree with the previous reviewer. I think this piece is actually very well thought out.

You have a great triangular composition going on here, which moves the viewer's eye very naturally from left to right. The tilt of the neck and the angle of the shoulder and the bend of the knees all create lines which draw attention towards the moon, which really is the focal point of the scene since it's the primary light source, is pretty radiant, and also rather large. Now, all of that might not have been intentional, but that's okay. Some elements of composition can be intuitive, so, you probably have good instincts.

I also think that overall the anatomy of the main figure well done. There are a couple of small problems, but nothing glaring; the hands could use a little work (the right hand doesn't quite look natural as it's holding the lighter and the thumb on the left hand looks just a little big); and, I think based on the angle of her hips and the fact that we're seeing some of her navel, her chest should probably be angled towards us a little more - meaning that we'd see both breasts. Aside from that, she seems pretty well proportioned and you really did a good job of conveying a particular kind of emotional distance in her facial expression.

The coloring and shading is also well done for the most part. If I were to recommend one thing, I would say try and add some darker tones to your shading, maybe adding one or two layers of varying shades of gray (if you're using GIMP or Photoshop, create a new layer, set the layer to multiply and then start shading). I think it would help your figures look a little more solid. I know you're influenced by anime, so, take a look at how some of the figures are shaded and emulate that.

Overall good work.

Clueless-queen responds:

thanks for the very detailed review! Its nice to see someone on here who explains there comments XD

[Chilling Winter]

Good use of color and understated emotion

I really like this one; of the stuff that you've uploaded, this is my favorite.

I seem to recall you complaining that the hand looked wrong when you posted this in the art forum, but I actually think it looks just fine. Not sure if you changed anything since you posted it in your thread, but it definitely looks good now.

I really like your selective use of color and the restraint you used in picking skin tones which emphasize the other cool colors in the painting.

From an anatomical standpoint, I also think this is very polished, particularly when compared with some of your other work.

Really, there's very little to criticize, except for some minor points. Some portions of the hair get a little blurry, which is slightly distracting since the linework is pretty clear in other parts. And, while I like the splash of rose on the cheek, there's something about the contours of it that make the cheekbone seem like it extends out a little too close to where the ear begins.

Overall though a really good piece and I'd be remiss not to give it a 10.

dreamzmighty responds:

Thank you very much! I actually put pink in the ear later, which MIGHT be why it seems to go out too far. I used a reference picture, though the hair wasn't. And I did actually try to fix up the hand. I can stand it a lot better now. Thank you very much. (: I'm glad you like it!